Hi Veronica I really enjoyed the story “Fire”. It definitely grabs one’s attention right away and manags to keep it. I have a couple small critiques. The first is that you gave away the first twist too soon. I think you should have revealed that it was a dream a bit later. The second is that the end confused me a bit. Maybe it makes more sense if you read the rest of the stories,but if this is supposed to stand by itself then… I plan on reading the rest of your writings available here. I have enjoyed them thus far.
Thank you so much for the feedback. I see what you mean. It’s hard to know how to work these snippets as they are intended to go together as a whole. Definitely something for me to work on.
The sun is setting, turning the water of the lake to liquid gold.
Hi Veronica
I really enjoyed the story “Fire”. It definitely grabs one’s attention right away and manags to keep it. I have a couple small critiques. The first is that you gave away the first twist too soon. I think you should have revealed that it was a dream a bit later. The second is that the end confused me a bit. Maybe it makes more sense if you read the rest of the stories,but if this is supposed to stand by itself then…
I plan on reading the rest of your writings available here. I have enjoyed them thus far.
Thank you so much for the feedback. I see what you mean. It’s hard to know how to work these snippets as they are intended to go together as a whole. Definitely something for me to work on.